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Review:CambAngst says:
Hi there!

So I've been hanging onto this review for a while, waiting for a milestone. Ergo, you get review #850. Hope you enjoy it!

I liked the way you started this chapter off. Those five sentences do a great job of capturing her mindset, I think. They're simple and somewhat light-hearted and very meaningful to be so short. Nice job!

This Adri is a strange cat. I can't for the life of me figure out whether he's interested in Pansy in a romantic sense or merely as subject matter for his articles. This chapter would lead me to believe the latter, but there's always a spark of interest there. It's somewhat maddening, so I can only imagine how Pansy feels.

He told it well, and Pansy found herself laughing at several points. -- I don't know what it is about that sentence, but I had it highlighted from my first read-through. Something about saying "he told it well" is quintessentially Pansy. It's complimentary, but not over the top. It implies both accomplishment and room for improvement. When you are in the Pansy Zone, it's all about the little things.

“I hope you don’t mind. I ordered the same for the both of us—it’s a dish that I’ve found goes well with just about every drink that a person could order, works for just about every set of taste buds a person could have and –this one’s the key—it fits in well during an interview. Doesn’t take long to chew and swallow.” -- This passage left me nearly at a loss for words. In one way, it's sort of discouraging. This really is meant to be a working dinner for him. He's geared their food around being able to ask her questions and her being able to answer them. Not very romantic, to say the least. But, it's a very practical idea and it will definitely help to maintain social gracefulness -- heaven forbid somebody should have to speak with their mouth full -- in an antisocial sort of way. Things like that make me thing that he'd be perfect for her. Ugh. So conflicted!

I thought you did an awesome job with Pansy's response to the "trap question" on Hermione's elvish welfare law. That one seemed almost geared to get her to say something controversial, and she handled it tactfully and gracefully. Maybe there's hope for her yet!

And then he doesn't call. Some situations transcend the line between the muggle and magical world.

The scene in the pet store was cleverly done. I enjoyed the parallel tracks that the story was moving on as Pansy tried to deal with both Astor's problems and her own.

She was a grown woman, and a grown woman wouldn’t write their name linked with a man’s on parchment paper. That practice would have to wait until their engagement was announced. -- Oh, goodness. Pansy has a terrible habit of getting ahead of herself.

Now I'm really looking forward to the next time we see Pansy and Adri together. It's so hard to tell whether there's anything there. I need more empirical data!

Great job with this chapter!

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