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Review:AlexFan says:
I've actually seen this on the humor page while I was stalking it and I'd been planning on checking it out for a while but I never got to it until now.

I can see how something like this would be believable, it's kind of like the Princess Diaries and all but not really. I love this side of royalty, the part where they're annoyed about havig to sign so much paperwork and everything.

I'm beginning to think that Queen Elizabeth II must feel this was sometimes but she does it for her country.

I find it a bit unrealistic how Carolyn puts all of her trust in her government. I personally think she should be involved in her go ernment or at the very least know what's going on. But I could be watching too much Doctor Who.

By the sounds of it, Carolyn would have no idea if there was something wrong going on that her government is responsible for because she doesn't seem involved.

The other thing was the little insertions here and there. Like when you mentioned that she lived in a castle and then Carolyn interrupted with yeah, I live in a castle. It interrupted the flow of the circle and kind of startled me a little.

But other than that, it was a good first chapter!
-Grace

Author's Response: Hi!

I really should be more explicit with this information... okay so Chancellor Evans was the sub-in queen while Carolyn was in training after her mother died. Because Carolyn is still 'in control' of the country, her signature passes the laws. Chancellor Evans has assistants in the government who report to her. Chancellor Evans is Carolyn's cousin, and because of that and the years Chancellor Evans was running the country, Carolyn has complete faith in her. Not her government, but Chancellor Evans.

And, because the government was chosen by the people (democratic government, but the Queen has 'full reign' over the country in name only (Carolyn's family and the democratic government have been working together for years now, and everyone in the country is okay with that because Carolyn doesn't really pass laws. The people they voted for do.

But thank you for pointing that out, I will try and make that more comprehensible :)

The flow, I will definitely work on!

Thanks so much for the CCs and for taking the time to read this!

Lo:)


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