Hi Sian! :)
I'm back!! Which is great because I usually don't review this fast. I just HAD to. I love your story so much. I only stopped between chapters to favourite it. I'm sorry my previous review looks so weird poem-ish. Something went wonky with the formatting.
Now, onto the review. You writing is so much better in this one. I don't mean that the first one wasn't well written, because trust me, it was great! I just think you've improved here. Especially on the humour front. This one had me laughing throughout and I really REALLY loved Molly's voice! Her internal monologue is so funny and I can relate so well to her sarcastic side! I haven't seen her as sarcastic person. This was a really nice addition :)
I tend to be sarcastic as well, so I really laughed along and GOT her sense of humour. Just the other day, I met a friend and I ended up running into him a couple of days later, so he asked me how I was doing and I replied saying, "Oh! Yes, in a matter of just over 24 hours, SO much has changed." :P Okay, you get the point. I should stop being lame.
Anyway, I usually don't like Molly much. But I really love her in this fan fic! :) The whole clumsy sitting-standing bit and sprouts thing literally made me laugh out loud. And erm, yeah. My brother might have given me a really weird stare because of that... uhhh. I mean I laughed a lot.
The date was described so well! It was natural and realistic and at the same time it was funny! Given their relationship, or lack of it, there was bound to be some awkward-ness and you've written, handled it and overcome it well :)
I love that Cyrus has an adventurous side, and that he's pulling Molly along! Wouldn't hurt her to live a bit maybe :P Like it wouldn't her hurt her to like a guy. (The realisation of liking him made her thoughts a whole lot more hilarious, btw!)
The whole chapter was excellent. I had so much fun reading it. I was thoroughly engrossed in your story. A very original next gen fic!
And I know this review is very gush-y and really doesn't make too much sense, but what can I say? I loved it :D
Keep it up, Sian! I'm off to read some more :D
Author's Response: Ah, this makes me feel even worse that I took so long to respond! *hides* I hope you know this doesn't mean your reviews weren't extremely appreciated! (And I meant to say this in the last response but forgot - you wrote review 70 on this story! Thank you so much!)
Molly's humour and inner monologue was probably my favourite part of writing this. I'm also quite sarcastic, even though I try to tone it down more now, and I loved including that in her character! Actually, just reading this review has made me want to write about her again... gah, no time...
Phew, I'm so pleased that you found the date realistic! I'm so bad at writing these sorts of things, and to be honest I don't know why I chose to write this genre, but I'm glad that you're enjoying it!
Yes, I think that Cyrus is definitely good for her! Thank you so much again for this wonderful review, Adi! ♥