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Review:randomwriter says:
Hi Ashwini!
Wait! Ashwini? :P Fellow Indian, I see. Always nice to find another one over here! :)

Anyway, I clicked on the Random Story button and ended up here. I recognized your penname from the forums and decided to read your story. It looked quite interesting!

I really like the story line you have here. There aren't many stories that concentrate on post-Hermione Krum, and it's always nice to see something new :)

I think you have great potential to develop Krum's character further. It will be interesting to see where you take it from here. At first, I was quite puzzled to see that Krum was still so hung up over Hermione, but after reading the entire chapter, his sentiment made a lot of sense. I think you could spend a couple more sentences connecting his background to his feelings for Hermione to enhance the flow :)

You were very descriptive in the beginning, but it sort of disappeared towards the end. So another thing you could do to improve the flow is add description. Talk about what Krum saw in muggle London, maybe? :)

I do have one suggestion though. You've made a few punctuation and grammatical errors. There's also another issue here, but it's not very huge. There are about three-four words that you haven't used in the right context. As I really think you might have a good story here, I would recommend reading through it again and fixing the errors :) You could also get a beta. It might work quite well. But don't be disheartened because what you've got is of a good standard and you story line is pleasant :)

I would suggest splitting up some of your paras to make them easier to read. Formatting really helps in making sure your work doesn't seem too dense or heavy!

I like where this story is going, and there is NOTHING wrong with romance and fluff! :) Good work, Ashwini! I will be back for more, and I really hope that you didn't mind the constructive criticism! :)

Oh, and your banner and CI are gorgeous! *_*

Author's Response: Ooh, a review from another fellow Indian! :D It was nice to see you here.
I began writing this story just because there aren't many stories about Viktor Krum's life. I am fascinated by his character and I love writing him. =]
I have edited the grammar errors and have split the paras but the version in currently in the queue. Thanks for suggesting though!
The credit for my lovely banner and CI goes to the amazing TDA artists. You can see their names in the summary. =]
Hope to see you back!
Ashwini


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