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Review:APerkins says:
Hey! A story arc! I didn't even notice! Wanna know why?
Which means i now get to ask what a story arc is .. cause yeah, I get the main focus is on susan :) but you're still advancing the main plot.

Also I wanna apologise for me typos in the reviews. Mostly I'm reviewing on my phone so predictive text is fun and I forget to reread properly. No I don't forget. I just reread in a hurry cause I'm eager for the next chapter.

Point is I really enjoyed the story arc. Well written.

I find the references to Hugo and al being kids insulting and am offended on their behalf! They aren't kids! They have Honda n everything.

On well actually Hugo is a big kid. Was actually impressed that you put a character into both of them in a matter of lines. And I forgot in the last review to mention how well done the harry and Rob planning to go rescue Hugo and Al from the ministry was. The tension made me want read faster so I could see whether or not they would go off in the wrong direction or whether they would get the message in time! Thrilling bit of writing :)

Author's Response: In fairness to you, I think I decided that these three chapters formed an "arc" after they were pretty much done. It sounded like a good thing to say in an author's note. ;)

Don't worry about the spelling and grammar. I have yet to have a problem figuring out what you mean. Except for that Kriffin/Hermys mix-up, but you clarified that quickly enough.

If you're Harry or Ron or Hermione -- particularly if you're Molly or Arthur -- I don't think Al, Hugo and their contemporaries will ever stop seeming like kids. It's a generational thing. I'm not sure what having a Honda has to do with anything, but I suspect your autocorrect is biting you again. :p

I originally had Hugo's patronus arriving in the attic and Harry and Ron rushing directly off to the lake. Then I remembered Susan's message. Frankly, it works out better because it leaves a bit of a knowledge gap between Ron and Harry vs. Hermione and Esme. At any rate, I'm really pleased that you liked it!

Thanks so much for all of the awesome reviews!

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