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Review:shez says:
SO.I love this. I really genuinely love this.

The inherent problem with fanfiction, I think, is that most people gravitate towards the lovey-dovey fics and gems like these go unnoticed. Seriously though, the writing is PHENOMENOL, the plot--I can't even...I'm hyperventilating right now because it's so D*** exciting! I love the darkness and mystery here and the way you ended this is, whoah. LOVE IT. I have an affinity for dark, twisted characters like Devlin. I'm writing one myself.

I don't know how I feel about Devlin right now. I want to see him grow up and develop into a monster (or not haha, your story, your choice) and I want to see what happens when Harry finds him. I want to see what you make him, because he already seems to be a rather *demented* six-year-old. It's almost without rhyme or reason but I'm sure you explain it later. I wonder if he's Harry's son at all, actually.

I want to see how the relationship between him and the Dark Lord will develop. What I will recommend however is that you revise your summary a bit so that readers are more apt to click this gem of a story. You need a bit of a hook (Don't give away major plot points in the summary!) PM me if you need help with that. I see major potential in this story and I sincerely hope you re-request. Maybe we can brainstorm our macabre storylines together haha.

Author's Response: :D Glad you loved it! I do agree about the lovey-dovey thing and totally grinned when you called this a "gem". Most people who read it seem to like it, but it still makes me grin whenever I hear it.

You obviously need a paper bag to breath into if you're going to survive the next couple chapters then - I'll make sure to remind you when I re-request. ;-) It's a horrible, terribly, electrifying roller-coaster up ahead. This was the climb - wait until we drop.

I was purusing your story. It's on my bookmarks to read when I fly to Germany in two-weeks. I will probably save it to my iPad and bombard you and others with reviews when I am back.

Devlin is definitely a Potter. He is definitely on his way to becoming a monster. I don't think he will be another Voldemort (from Rowling's standpoint because part of Voldemort was the conditions under which he was conceived), but I do not promise a happy ending (which might incidentally make you happy). There is reason and some of it is hinted at in this chapter if you read between the lines enough.

I totally need to redo my summary and would be glad for any help at all - I suck at expect a PM from me. I actually have 23 chapters of this written off this site (I'm bad about re-entering the "waiting line" when one chapter gets accepted) and this is a rewrite of a completed story (although there is a sequel - also partially written), so I know it's here to stay and I won't drop it - sorry that probably wasn't your question but it's something I always consider in the potential of a story.

I do love brainstorming! I will give your story a head-start before the plane - but if I love it I forewarn you that I'm saving it (or will try to), because I really need good stuff to read on this flight!

Let me see if I can catch a space in your review thread. :)

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