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Review:APerkins says:
Awww ... Be warned, I'm on my phone again. .. puter issues. But I'll try n re read before I send!
What a nice lovely solution to the problem.
I'm still not a fan of Rowenas. Her solution is to fix the educating of kids. . But that will ... as godric said it doesn't solve the main problem. Presumably that's where the statute of secrecy will come in later.

I feel like we have missed a little bit. Rowena asked if godric teaching them had helped. .
But we don't know what it helped? I mean muffle can now produce a caterpillar but it has not helped the issue of anti wizard sentiment anywhere.

Still I can see how it's a terrier and the seed of an idea to start a school.
:) I feel like this story we have got straight into and the plot line takes off right from the beginning.
You know me, the more conflict the better. And it doesn't get any more complex than muggles hating wizards.
Yay!
As always your strongest point is your dialogue. And in this story you've woven in description so naturally it just flows. Action, description, dialogue, you are writing really well! Love it! :)

Author's Response: Well, you might not like Rowena, but without her, Hogwarts may not have existed at all! :p

She was asking if it helped the children feel less guilty about doing magic and having magical abilities. Maybe I didn't make that clear enough in the chapter, I'll go back and have a look at that.

yeah, this story does start out better with conflict/action from the beginning. I started this after I finished writing TBAH, so I'd figured out how to actually plan out a plot by that point, lol.

I'm so glad you like the dialogue! Sometimes I worry it's not archaic enough so it's really great to hear that it's strong. Thank you so much for the review!


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