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Review:Illuminate says:
Hi! Review Tag!

I really really like epistolary stories- they are so easy to read and have a set structure which works so wonderfully with character-based stories. That's why I'm very pleased you wrote this as a letter rather than just Regulus's internal monologue. He has a point to make, and he sifts through his feelings and grief rather than it spinning out of control which it probably would be if he were just talking to her in his head.

This is written very well. I like the picture of Mary that you painted, she comes across as very fiesty and a great match for your Regulus. He is very well written also; it makes sense that he would decide to join the Death Eaters out of his grief and rage; I also love that you mentioned trying to kill Voldemort for Mary, for that little tidbit of motive for Regulus that ties into canon. Love it.

I think if I were to suggest one little thing, it would be to linger on why Mary died a little more. I know you touch on it, and it might be your decision for it to be too painful for him to think about, but I think it makes a little more sense for him to question it slightly more. But that's just my opinion xD

All in all, wonderful job!

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! I love playing around with unusual writing methods which is partly why I wrote this as a letter, so I'm glad you think it worked :) I definitely think it would have had a very different tone if it was just him thinking about her in his internal monologue so this was a fun way to make the story more structured even though it only had one real character.

I'm glad you liked Mary, and thought she was a match for Reg! I get annoyed quite often reading about couples who are totally wrong for each other in fic, so I really tried to give these two complimentary traits and paint a picture of the tumultous relationship their respective personalities would have left them with.

I kind of tried to leave Mary's death very ambigious. Not only is Regulus still in denial and doesn't want to think about it, but he still doesn't really know WHY Mary did what she did, doesn't know her motives or anything, and because their relationship was a secret he can't find out any details without seeming suspicious, so there's not much more he can say when it's only from his POV. That said, I'll keep your feedback in mind next time I give this an edit! Maybe I could add a few lines that make it clearer while leaving that ambiguity :)

Thanks for the lovely review!


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