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Review:APerkins says:
Oooh I love the Percy/Audrey scene. Have several times tried to write about indecision and torn desires, and (if I do say so myself) upon each occasional I have failed dismally. But this? This was how it should be done!

Following on from that, talking to himself in the mirror? mehhh. not sold. well on the mirror? Sure, but wasnt sure what you were trying to convey by highlighting his dependeny on the receptionist while trying to restore his marriage.

My guess is that you are trying to say he is fooling himself by thinking he wants to restore the marriage when he is still so double minded and needy of another woman.
I think sometimes reviewing after every chapter is not fair, because I am not sure what you wanted to do with that, but you will (probably ) reveal that in the next chapter. If I would jsut wait instead of giving my thoughts, then all would be fine! (And i would have nothing to say!

Hermione is so Hermione it is funny. I love Luna, and I am impressed with the leap of logic that Harry and Ron made the the journal being a ruse.
Teh reader is already considering the idea, based on the circumstance of Flint's death, but Harry and Ron dont know it, so for them to consider stealing a book a ruse?
Well.I am impressed. That is all.

Author's Response: Poor Percy! He really isn't doing well in the relationship department at this point. I'm really pleased that the scene works well for you because I've always been a little worried that he comes off as being too pathetic. As far as his dependency on the Minister's secretary... well, you'll just have to wait and see about that. More will be revealed, as you suspect. And reading a mystery novel isn't supposed to be fair. It wouldn't be as much fun if it was. ;)

I really love writing Luna. I wish I could have made more opportunities for her in this story.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!


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