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Review:kristyhes says:
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Hello there! Sorry for the lateness but I was busy..

So I think that your story is really good and the introduction to the plot also was good.. Carolyn seems to be very mature and I think it's necessary when your in charge of a whole country.. I also like her personality and I think that there will be more to see in the other chapters..

If I got it well Carolyn is a muggle right and her sister who is 11 received her letter from Hogwarts and I'm assuming that her deceased mother was a witch.. I think that the plot is interesting and that the way you wrote this first chapter makes the reader curious about what will happen next..

Now a few things.. I did not quite understand the part at the end " if I didnít get all the information on them that I could to keep her safe." I don't know if you typed it wrong or if it's the way you wanted it, but I think there's something missing in this sentence. Also in the last sentence " with (will) be void "?

So overall it was a good chapter!

Toodles,
kristyhes(gryffiefan)

Author's Response: Hi!
And I totally understand! Real life can get hectic! :)

Yay! Good introduction! And as for Carolyn, you'll soon find that her maturity is just an act. One can only be presentable for a certain amount of time before one cracks.

And you did get it right, although their mother was a muggle as well, leaving Marielle a muggleborn. I'll try and make that clearer when I patch this up. But yay! I'm so glad you think it's interesting!

The stuff at the end I will look over with a fine-toothed comb, specifically for those mistakes, so thank you for pointing those out ;)

Thank you so much for your time and this was really helpful!
Lo:)


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