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Review:academica says:
Hello Angie, here with your requested review :)

I really liked this story. It was heartwarming and I couldn't help but think of the imagery associated with a crisp autumn morning - cloudy skies, leaves falling, a slight chill in the air. Fall is my favorite time of year and I really loved the atmosphere your story created for me.

I think you did just fine with Harry's characterization. It was nice to see him able to feel happiness and excitement even after the war and all of the death that he endured. He seems to have accepted the deaths of those close to him rather than being angry or depressed about them. It was a lovely touch there at the end to have his family watching him from afar and sharing in his joy, even if they were in a different world.

I liked the plot, too. I think the short length works well and the story definitely achieves its purpose, which seemed to be just a short drabble about Harry's way of honoring his loved ones. I also think the story fits in well with canon, so I certainly wouldn't worry about that.

Finally--the dialogue looks good, too. I could definitely hear Harry speaking those words in his voice and sounding very natural, if a bit subdued. You really captured the person I think of when I think about adult Harry, the man quietly standing at King's Cross sending his children off to school for another term. The tone here was really nice and just very well done.

I don't have any critique for you, I'm afraid. Nice job, and I hope this review is helpful :)

-Amanda

Author's Response: Hey Academica! Thanks a ton for your lovely review.

I am pleased you found the story heartwarming and that you could visualise the autumn morning I tried to create. It's a great compliment coming from you as your imagery is always perfect =)

It's such a relief to have you say that Harry's characterisation was fine. I tried to show that the war had made him accept the deaths of the people he loved and he had come to terms with it so I am glad that came across well. My favourite part was writing the end of them watching over him so I am pleased you liked that too.

I was worried that this was perhaps a little too short but I am glad the length works for you. It is indeed a drabble about just that =) I usually don't write much canon-compliant stuff so I am happy that this fit it in well with canon!

The dialogue is always a problem with me but you've really put my worries at ease by saying that it sounded natural and showed an adult Harry.

No critique? OMG you've made my day! Thank you so much =) Your review put a big smile on my face and was definitely helpful!


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