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Review:lia_2390 says:
Okay, why don't you just rip my heart out, throw it on the floor and step on it?

There are so many things I could say about this one-shot. Most of which I doubt I can articulate very well, but I will try.

I've always wondered about this pairing. Compared to the other characters authors decide to put Lily with (including what is canon), I cannot get over how much Remus and Lily make sense. Both very bookish and kind. Both fiercely protective of their loved ones. Most of Sirius's musings regarding them early on are exactly what I thought.

Remus's characterisation is spot on here and exactly how I pictured him as a teenager. Never mind the perceived bookworm tag people place on him, including his own friends. He's a human being, he has a whirlwind of thoughts and feelings and ambitions. He's also in love with a girl, but feels too shy to make anything out of it (at first). Even in his anger and disappointment, he never raises his voice. He is so very Remus - that's the best way I can put it. The library scene was my favourite to read. Even though he barely said a word, I felt he screamed so loud on the inside. Never once though, did he compare himself to his friend, a bitter rant about how he could have been better. Again, this is consistent with who he is (at least, how I see him).

Lily, on the other hand, made me smile and not necessarily in a good way. There are many characterisations of Lily Evans, all on different sides of the scale. We are led to believe that she was an extremely good person who deserved every nice thing in the world. Recently, I've taken on a more jaded approach. She's not that good, but she isn't bad either. In her life, she's been through a lot - from her sister's rejection, and at this point in your timeline, Severus's as well. She has begun to realise that not everything exists in black and white.

Don't think too highly of me, will you? I don't deserve it and don't dispute that fact.

If I had to pick a favourite line, it would be this one. She summed up everything about him and herself.

For me, it was at that point that whatever they had, was lost. She is no saint and she knew it; Remus should have taken her word for it.


I'm really glad we got this exchange. This is a fantastic one-shot and I'm thrilled I got to read it. You should feel proud :)

Lia

Author's Response: Hi Lia! I'm not sorry that I made you feel like that as it showed what I was trying to do worked :P

I know what you mean about how much they would suit one another, which is why I'm surprised other pairings such as Sirius/Lily and Snape/Lily are a lot more popular, even compared to Jily Remus and Lily make a lot more sense to me for those exact reasons you listed.

I'm so glad that you found his characterisation was spot on because I've always had a soft spot for him and want to do him proud. I think the whole thing about him being quiet and never saying what he really thinks is his biggest downfall in a way despite it being an arguably good quality as it just lets people trample over him at times. Aw, poor Remus because the one he time he does stand up he gets rejected by Harry.

I've taken a jaded approach to her recently too. I think with all the issues in her life such as Snape, Petunia and then being a Muggleborn she couldn't have been this balanced and normal person everyone makes her out to be, so I had fun twisting it here. I'm so glad that you liked that line as it was one of my favourites too.

Thank you for this wonderful review, and I'm really glad I got you in the exchange too!

-Kiana


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