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Review:patronus_charm says:
You really shouldnít have mentioned salacious, I ended up sitting there for about five minutes saying it over and over again. :P

I really liked how you actually followed through with Helenís dream with the large amount of background information she had such as the knowledge of modern archaeologists and the history of it all. I cannot explain how many times Iíve seen people say they want their MC to be this and not follow through with action. Plus, it allows me to sit here in history nerd heaven and soak up everything.

Your geographical references throughout this chapter were really great. It really gave the story an authentic air with the way Helen kept on referring to different things, making her really come off as person who has lived there for years. Ah, it just makes me want to go and explore it all even more now.

Helen and Moodyís verbal jibing was, again, excellent. Itís fast becoming the thing I enjoy most about the chapter as a whole due to their differing and yet similar characters combining together. Helen actually appears as herself in front of him with the rudeness, swearing and revealing her dream and it was almost relaxing to see instead of her forcing this mask upon herself.

The constant references to the Muggle world left me intrigued. I mean, I gathered that Helen was a witch with her references to that but she doesnít seem all that inclined to do magic and couldnít even remember the body-bind spell. I have a feeling a lot of mystery is hiding behind that and I canít wait for it to be uncovered.

The suspense in the knife scene was really great. I honestly didnít know what to expect but with the way Helen kept on fighting back against the attacker and even using sly trickery such as fainting was really excellent and almost had me chuckling away due to the ingenuity of it all.

Great chapter!


Author's Response: Haha, it is quite a fun word to say. I don't know why. XD

It's great to hear that you like that! Her drive to find a place for herself and a solid purpose in life is a significant part of the plot, even more so than the demon itself. The demon enables Helen to challenge herself and discover what she's truly capable of, but at the same time, she still needs to learn the basics. She's come to a place where she doesn't know the language or very much about the history, and it actually reveals a lot about her that she takes the time to learn these things.

It seems that she becomes more angry around Moody because something about him makes her mask slip. She wants to appear to be a particular kind of person, and when Moody comes along, she can't help but be herself. It gets more interesting when he finds himself in the same predicament later on. :P

It's not that much of a mystery, actually. She's spent the last five years repressing her magic, both because she doesn't want to be recognized and because she's living among Muggles. She also forgets spells because she wasn't very good at them to begin with - she never put forward much effort in school and was never encouraged to do so by her parents. I'll try to work that into the story more - I think I know how. :)

Thank you again for your lovely review! It means a lot to receive feedback for this story - it's probably still my favourite to write. ^_^

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