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Review:Cannons says:
Hi! Here for the review swap :)

So first of all I think that you have done a great job with this first chapter, it is intriguing enough to read on and leaves so many unanswered questions which is great.

You did a really great job in describing your characters situation and how she felt hopeless. Your descriptions about being shackled and the chain on her neck is so powerful and makes such an impact at the start of the chapter.

I love how you made the reference to her being the 13th person at the table, such an ominous reference.

I think you did a great job in describing how rough the Death Eaters are and how she was caught.

Also the difference between the dungeon and the rest of the house was great and your characters mood seems to brighten for a moment.

Draco seems just right, simply born in to the wrong family imo.


Author's Response: Hi!

Such a lovely review, thank you so much :)
Im very glad that you appreciated the little dents in the chapter such as the 13 people just to give the story a little depth. I'm happy that it didn't sound confusing or anything like that haha. Also, draco's character felt a little vague from my point of view so it's good to know that you thought he was written alright!

Thank you again! :)

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