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Review:patronus_charm says:
Here for the review swap!

Yay for Coldplay lyrics! I thought I recognised them, so I went to the bottom of the page and I was glad to be proved correct. Plus, listening to Violet Hill while reading this made it connect to me a lot more. A small OCD time of mine so feel free to ignore it, but there was a lot of blank space at the beginning of the chapter and purely for presentation reasons it might be a good idea to minimise. :)

On with the review though!

This, ‘A single slanted line of yellow light’ and this, ‘The fading light kissed the snow delicately’ was some really lovely description! In fact, there were lots of lovely pieces of it throughout the story and it really showed how far you’ve come since I last read your work and it’s exciting to think about how far you could go!

The horror of Gerard and Williamson was written really well. It had me on tenterhooks and the way you kept the suspense up with waiting until the next section was a great idea, as it made even more eager as to why Gerard felt like his intestine was like that. The description of their death was really horrible, and I mean that in a good way with how it gave me shivers! I can just picture their bodies, the blood and the knife so clearly in my mind that I might have to do something about it before I sleep.

Your dialogue was really fitting in this story with the way you adapted it for characters. It really showed the divide between characters and their social standing and added a lot of freshness to the story.

The link to Canon was great! I like the idea of Teddy being an investigator now as it keeps him attached to what Tonks did. Maggie Bagshot characterisation was also really good and I’m eager to see what relation she is of Bathilda. Then the Potters just living down the street! It certainly is looking a little suspicious.

A really good first chapter, and thanks for the swap!

-Kiana

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