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Review:randomwriter says:
Hi Kiana :) I'm here for our swap! I usually never get reviews done fast, so this is a first! :)

Your Author's Page left me confused because you asked me to pick whatever I'd like to read. There were so many stories I wanted to and I shall add them to my reading list :) The reason I picked this one over the others was that I have never read a story about Pansy before. She's one of those characters that we all put down as irritating and one-dimensional. I was curious to see how you'd built up on that. The second reason I picked this is because the title was really intriguing. It made me want to know more.

I loved your take on Pansy. Through this intense, but short character study, you've been able to bring out so much of her. In a way, you've justified how she is portrayed in the books. You've spoken about her background in the slightest of ways and that might have been a very good reason for the way she turned out. Another thing you did beautifully was bringing out Pansy's identity which manifests itself as more of a non-identity. She is an amalgamation of what people expect her to be. She hasn't ever found her individuality and she isn't her own person. You've written this part of her personality really well.

I love your title, as I mentioned and I love how you've wielded it in the story itself. You've used the title to provide a sort of a backdrop to your entire story, which worked very well here. It lent the piece an almost poetic or rhythmic feel and it was written so well.

There were many powerful sentences or paragraphs in this one-shot that really caught my eye. I cannot possibly list them all (I might end up listing the whole story!), but here are a few I particularly enjoyed. They conveyed a lot more than just the surface meaning.

"At times, she wonders whether her life is an act, a play, a scene laid out for others to enjoy while she can hide from herself. "

"A child playing with life, a child playing with playing. All her actions have been without cause or reason; they were just a game. A game which has to end now she acknowledges the truth of it all. The truth she still tries to deny.

"She knows that the only thing that the cigarettes and the make-up are hiding her from is the person most unknown to her, herself. Nothing more. Nothing less."

And the entire last two paras. They tied up this one-shot really well and I think you did a good job with the ending. One thing I would suggest is to have a single sentence in the end that brings out her pain and angst in a final and definitive manner, but that's just a suggestion. This story is brilliant as it is and I'm glad I picked it. There's so much depth and beauty to it and for the first time ever, I feel like there's more to Pansy than meets the eye! :)

Author's Response: Haha, maybe I should have picked one for you then? :P I'm glad you chose this one though, because I thought the same until I wrote this one-shot and now it's making me desperate to have more information about her and see what she was actually like!

*blushes* I'm so glad that you liked my characterisation of her as I was little worried it might have been too OOC or something like that. You picked up on exactly what I was trying to do because a lot of her behaviour did seem to be rather showy in the book, so it made me wonder whether it was all real or not. Then it sort of evolved into her never really being herself.

I have to admit, it was in the story first and then I chose it as the title, but I'm glad you liked it still! It was poetic though? *blushes again* You're being too nice to me here, and I feel this response is inadequate with it's ramblings.

Yes, I don't think the review box quite stretches into fitting the whole story into it :P I'm really glad you picked out those lines though, as they sort of showed her whole idea of acting and not being true. She does turn out to be a rather helpless person by the end of it.

I'll definitely go and review the last sentence, and see if I can make it angstier (is that a word?) so thanks for pointing it out! Thank you for such a wonderful review, it really, really did make my day, and I hope Pansy's got a new fan now!

-Kiana


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