So, reading this I realised that one of my comments in an earlier review (chapter 1, I think?) was totally negated. I said about the glasses, how had she got them and why would that have been a priority, but obviously here you said that she'd had them before, so I just missed that and you can just ignore it ;)
Again, your grasp of canon characters is astounding. McGonagall and Dumbledore are so hard to write and get right, you know, and you seem to do it so easily! I'm almost jealous, lol. I love how you mention their long friendship and how they know each other so well, almost too well, and yet they still disagree on things, and they sound so much like how they do in the books.
Sadie is genuinely a really great OC. She's clever, but not overly so, has things she struggles with and things she's good at, has flaws and weaknesses and strengths and so many issues (!)... she's such a brilliantly complex character that I can't help but find her fascinating. I'm really curious to see what you do with her - how she deals with school, what actually happened to her - and how she develops. You've made it difficult for yourself, but seriously, she's brilliant.
Obviously this was more of a filler chapter than a hugely plot-filled chapter (more nuggets of information, though! So curious...) but I like that the plot seems to be moving a bit slowly at the moment. It feels to me almost like we're literally going along with Sadie, as she gets better and finds friends and learns to live again, I guess. It's also building up tension, which is really exciting as I'm wondering to what (I'm assuming her going to the Burrow...).
Your writing style again was lovely. It's very reminiscent of JKR herself, you know - it really reminds me of the books when I read this. Absolutely no mistakes I could see at all, nothing that felt a bit clunky or weird or anything... yeah, it's just flawless. You're obviously either an amazing editor or an incredible writer to write like this straight off. Either way, it's awesome.
Really enjoying this! :)
Author's Response: Yeah, another brilliant review from you! This is so exciting!
And don't worry at all about the glasses. Actually, it's a compliment. I throw clues out there, but I hope people don't get them all the first time through. Then later, when they read something else, they are like OH, that's what that was for! Does that make any sense? So I'm not worried at all that you made the glasses comment.
I will admit that writing Dumbledore and Minerva in this chapter WAS hard. I struggled to get out what I needed to and still have them stay in character. Makes me feel very good that you liked how it turned out. And I do believe they have been friends for a long time, a very comfortable, accepting friendship.
Yes! Sadie is seeming real! That's a huge thing for me. I am SO happy you find her facinating! And I'm really excited for you to see what happens to her. School, friends, family...they are all going to play a big part in how she develops. (And I hope I haven't made it TOO difficult for myself, lol.)
Yeah, filler chapters. I do tend to include them, but sometime you need them. And I do like giving out clues of information. I just feel like Sadie has had SO many changes I needed to move a bit slow at first. Glad you are liking the pacing.
Thank you again for such lovely, lovely reviews. You are so kind and they have just made my day again as I got to reread them so I could reply. Your compliments have helped restore my faith in my writing and I'm excited to work on it again!
I do hope you'll come back when you have time and find out more about Sadie and her story.