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Review:adluvshp says:
Hey! Here from the forums for your requested review.

I enjoyed this chapter quite a lot. I liked how Sadie interacted with the Weasley family and how they were all so sweet and welcoming to her. They were all pretty much in character and I liked that.

The awkwardness between Harry and Sadie was also nicely written, and yet at the same time, there was a budding friendship underlying their interactions and I liked it. You're very good at expressing emotions and meaning through your writing!

I also liked the flashback of Sadie first going to the sign-language class. It gave us more insight into her past which was good. The meal with the Weasleys was also a simple yet effective way to explain a bit more about Sadie, so good job there.

It's interesting that Molly and Arthur are Sadie's godparents and I wonder when they'll tell her and how she'll take the news. Another little detail that this chapter left me curious about was why did Sadie's parents letters to James and Lily go unanswered? Did they have a fight? Did they not talk? Did they simply not receive the letters? I am quite curious as to the relations between Harry's and Sadie's parents, and I wonder if it will have an impact on the two teens' friendship.

All in all, I think this chapter was pretty well-written and I liked it. Your plot is progressing with a steady pace which is not too slow and not too fast so good job. The flow was smooth and there were no grammar issues either. I am enjoying Sadie's characterisation as well and would love to see how she develops further, as well as how her relationship with Harry develops.

The only tiny bit of suggestion I have is to perhaps have Hermione and Ginny try and spend more time with Sadie, since they're both girls as well after all, and especially Hermione who is in general very kind and helpful. I think one-to-one interactions between Hermione and Sadie would be interesting and helpful. That is just my opinion though =)

Apart from that, I don't have any CC for you. Feel free to re-request!

Good work!
9/10
Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Hey, thanks so much for coming back! And I'm so sorry for taking so long to reply to this wonderful review. I've been kinda swamped by real life this last month.

Very glad you enjoyed the chapter. I have noticed that it is very hard to write "meet and greets" convincingly and not have a bunch of people standing uselessly around. Always comforting to know I did okay.

Aw, thank you! I find I do feel more comfortably writing emotion and character driven scenes than action or romance. Although I hope to branch out and include both of those later topics in this at some point. And I'm also happy you liked the start of the relationship between Sadie and Harry. I want them to get close, but I don't want it to happen instantly with no awkwardness. Finding a long lost relative has to be a bit weird.

The flashback was nice to finally be able to include, so glad you enjoyed it. The meal was also a nice way to get some information about Sadie out to readers.

Yup, Molly and Arthur are her godparents. I imagine they will have to share that news pretty quickly. And I'm really excited you caught the letter bit. You're the first person to do that. Answers for that will come later, promise. Notice that they were letters to Harry, not letters to Lily and James though. Just a hint for you.

Thank you SO much for your suggestion about Hermione and Ginny! As soon as I read it I knew you were so right, and a complete scene I wouldn't have thought of otherwise jumped into my head! I'm so excited to write it now! THANKS! *hugs*

You are awesome! Thanks for the great review!

-Farmgirl





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