Hey there - back again! :)
I'm really surprising myself by really enjoying this story - simply because it's something I don't ever read normally, and the kind of situation I normally don't like in ff because it can be so overdone.
Seriously, though, this is brilliant! I love how you're starting slowly, giving us bits of information to get us going, and how it's tying into canon events, with the World Cup in two days... your writing style is just so lovely, as well, it's so clear and precise and gah, everything just works, you know? There's genuinely nothing I can say about it other than that it's nice and easy to read and flows perfectly and just sucks you into the story and doesn't let you out until the end.
Your characterisation is flawless. All the canon characters - people others are normally scared to write because it's so easy to get them wrong - are just perfect. Honestly, I'm a little bit in awe! Harry, Ron, the twins, Mr and Mrs Weasley... they're just all exactly as they are in canon. It's uncanny. Incredibly, though, really.
The plot is so good, as well! I admit that the idea of Harry having lost cousins and James having relatives we don't know about in the books is one which I'm always nervous about reading, but you've done it so well and made it so believable and plausible that it just works brilliantly. The whole way you're drawing it in, Sadie being in fourth year at sixteen to catch up, her having lost her voice and not being able to talk... it's such a unique situation for a character and I'm so excited to see where you take her. I've rarely ever seen stories about children who can't talk so it's a really interesting idea.
I'm so curious as to if we're ever going to find out what happened to Sadie's parents, if there will be some kind of counter for the spell which took away her voice, how she's going to fit in and, well, just everything.
This really is a pretty awesome story! Sorry for the complete lack of anything really useful to say - I can't find anything wrong with it at all, nothing constructive to say, nothing picky to say... *shrugs* It's just amazing.
Author's Response: I love that you keep coming back again! Come back as much as you'd like! :D
And I am so excited that you are enjoying the story! I know I'm walking the fine line of cliches in this story, but after more than six years of sitting on it, afraid to share, I finally decided (with some help from a friend) to just do it. I'm glad I did, as people seem to be enjoying it.
Awww.now I'm blushing. Your gushing on my writing there is giving me a big head, but I thank you so much for it. It always feels so nice to have people tell you they enjoy your story. You comment about the story sucking you in and not letting you go is one of the nicest things anyone has said about this piece.
And yep, more blushing. I really do enjoy writing the canon characters. They are the ones that I fell for when I read the books, so they are the ones I want to have more adventures with. But I do worry others will be like "you can't write them, they aren't the aren't right." So thank you.
The Long Lost Relative Cliche. Yeah, I knew the danger when I started this. Another reason I waited SO long to start posting. But that's how the story was in my head and I finally realized I didn't want to change it. I just hope I can take something that can be so overdone and give it a fresh run.
Sadie not being able to talk is really the crux of this story, more even than the fact that she's Harry's cousin. I hope that keeps things interesting. I am sort of facinated by that kind of story, so we'll see how it goes.
More information about Sadie's family will be revealed a little at a time, I promise. I really hope you'll keep reading to find out more. As for the spell that took her voice, that will also be revealed farther down the line.
Don't appologize! Sometimes, a heartfelt gushing review is just what an author needs. I had rough spot in the last month where I really started to doubt myself and my story, so reading this helped a ton. *hugs* Thanks so very much!