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Review:Cannons says:
Hi!

So awesome banner btw.

This is an unusual idea, how did you come up with it? Your protagonist is really lucky to have control over a whole country when she is so young! (or unlucky ;) ) I'm not sure yet if she is a witch or not, but if not even better.

I'm excited to see where George Weasley comes in to this :)

There are some places where I would have probably used commas and things like here 'I took the mug and smiled as the steaming scent of Earl Grey tea wafted up. (, but) But looking down at the stack of letters, my smile dropped. '

anyway it's a cool idea and a nice opening chapter.

Cannons

Author's Response: Hey, hey!

As for the banner, that was all Idioteque @ TDA!

I came up with idea because I saw Idioteque's banner in her Up For Grabs and I *had* to have it. I couldn't let anyone else snag that masterpiece. So, I spent about three days trying to figure out a story that did the banner justice.

And Carolyn lucky to control a country? In a sense. She has to be extremely formal a large majority of the time, but she also has more power than most 19 year old's, so I guess her position is both a curse and a blessing.

George actually doesn't come in until the 6th chapter, but after that he is featured prominently. A little spoiler: he's extremely prejudiced when he first meets Carolyn.

Commas, I will work on them. Especially in those sentences you mentioned.

Thank you for this amazing review!

Lo :)


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