I'm here with your requested review!
Ok, so there's a couple spelling and grammar mistakes, but not really that many so just reread it and catch them.
Now, characterization is pretty good. I love this softer, more mature version of Ginny. You've portrayed her really well. Regulus seems really funny, although, how can ghosts live stream 'Doctor Who'? Do they have ghost computers? Hm? :P
I would like to see a little bit of back story on some of the other ghosts that come to her, e.g. how they move on, how they came to her, etc.
A little bit more description couldn't hurt either.
Now, on to the good bits.
SARCASM! It's so good! As a sarcastic person myself (can you tell? probably not via interweb...), I really liked the overload of sarcasm.
And the fact that apparently Regulus Black is cute (oooh, love interest?... with a dead guy? okay maybe not... or is it to be?).
I do think that Ellie is just a smidge antisocial though. It's just a hunch. Don't know why I think that. But in any case, it work. She's relatable in her awkwardness and antisocial behavior (while I'm not *that* bad, I can totally relate), and her funny little quips are to die for.
But not literally, because then she'd be the only human who can talk to us and I don't think I could deal with *that* much sarcasm.
So, in short, I really liked this chapter. Very well done and I'm super excited to see where this goes!
Please feel free to re-request!
Author's Response: Salutations!
Haha, yeah. The chapter probably does need to be gone over with a fine tooth comb to pick out all the spelling and grammar errors! I really don't like having spelling and grammar mistakes, so I'm forever finding them!
And of course they have ghost computers! Along with the ghost wifi, of course!
The way Ellie deals with her ghosts is explored a little further on - I have something huge planned for that, actually, so that should be fun. And yes, always the description. I think this chapter especially suffers from a lack of it.
Sarcasm is always the best. I'm so sarcastic myself, so I'm lucky in that way that it comes very naturally to me.
And Ellie and Regulus' relationship is... interesting, to say the least.
Ellie is a little bit antisocial. I like to think of her as more of an introvert, though, because she does well in the situations where she feels comfortable, and she still feels lonely from time to time, which is quite the conflict.
And yeah, between Ellie and Regulus, the sass and sarcasm are almost unbearable.
Thank you so much! Your CCs were much appreciated, if that didn't come through, as well as your positive feedback!