Hi :) I'm here with a very late review. I'm so sorry :( I'll try to make this extra special.
I know I keep telling you this, but I can't say it enough! Millie is lovely! I love her voice during her Point of View. She's really funny and her personality is so strong. And I know this is insane because she isn't real, but I feel like I can connect with her. If she was real, we'd get along quite well ;)
I am so in love with Sirius. He's one of my favourite characters and I always love him, but your portrayal of him is so amazing, and in many way, it's spot on! He's so concerned about his 'image' and he wants to always be portrayed as the tough guy or the heart breaker, but in reality, he is just as vulnerable and human as the rest of us. I just felt like giving him a hug, honestly!
The plot was absolute genius :D The rain and the rumour. And the best part was about how Millie said that they would definitely own up because:
1) They wouldn't watch Quidditch to be canceled and
2) They wouldn't want anybody else taking credit for their prank. I think that you got that bit spot on. Marauders are proud creatures and they would definitely not share credit :P
As for Dumbledore, I've always had the feeling that he liked the Marauders a LOT despite their pranks. He was always amused I guess. I'm sure he could fix it in just a flick of a wand anyway.
And who loved plot progressions? I DO :D I know Millie is resisting right now, but pretty soon she'll cave I guess. And I can't wait for some White/Black action. They'd balance each other out and it'll be great :D
As for CC, I saw a few punctuation and grammatical errors. There were also some weird sentence fragments. Nothing you can't fix, I'm sure :)
Anyway, keep up the good work! I love it :)
And once again, I'm so sorry for being late.
Author's Response: You don't have to be sorry about that! I totally made up for it by this late reply!
I'm so glad that you like her! There are moments where I don't, just because her reactions to some situations are so different to mine. But then again, because of this, she's quite a lot of fun to write, because I can pretend to be someone I'm not for a bit! I'm so happy that you feel as if you know her really well, and you two would get along!
Sirius is so much fun to write! He's so arrogant and conceited at times, but then he has these great moments, too. Thank you for liking him. More than Millie, I think, I was worried about writing Sirius, because he's my fave character, and you want to do them justice.
I loved writing the prank! It was a lot of fun. And yeah, Dumbledore totally has a soft spot for them. It's difficult not to, because they're just so adorable!
PLOT PROGRESSION OMG YOU HAVE NO IDEA HOW EXCITED I WAS. I WAS ACTUALLY BOUNCING IN MY CHAIR AS I WROTE IT.
This entire story needs an edit, so thank you for pointing that out! I'll make sure to find and fix those!
Thanks so much for this fantabulous review!