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Review:ohmymerlin says:
Hello again! I was having a break from 'studying' and going through the recently added stories and saw this pop up! What a coincidence! It was nearly a year ago since I reviewed this story! Time flies so fast sometimes!

This chapter was really good! I love all your characters and I especially like Layla's name (but that might just be because my name is Kayla, haha!) and they've all got really interesting personalities!

However, I did notice a few tense errors. You've written this in past tense and a few sentences had present tense, pulling me out of the story:

We're in Australia! It should probably be, 'We were in Australia!'

I am the worlds pickiest eater. They want me to eat kangaroo? I would have said, 'I was the world's pickiest eater. They wanted me to eat kangaroo?'

Side note: I've never actually eaten kangaroo either but according to my friends it kind of tastes like chicken! :p

Also, I don't live in Queensland but I have visited and because they're closer to the equator, it gets extremely humid and a lot of times it storms in the afternoons :p

Anyway, I like the very slow development of Layla and Albus! It's quite cute :3

Also, I loved Lottie's love of being naked! I think everyone likes being naked but not in front of others, ahaha! She's just has a lot of self-confidence then! :p

Being in a human knot is awful :( Especially if you're small because then people expect you to do all the acrobatic stuff and I think I've only ever once been in a knot which has been solved. :p

Anyway, this was a really good chapter! Can't wait to see more from you! :)

Author's Response: Thank you so so so much for this awesome review!! I'm glad you like it so far, and thank you so much for all of the advice, and for noticing my errors. I'll try to fix my tense issues! Thank you again :)

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