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Review:Cannons says:
Hi, here with your requested review! :)

WOOOW! Can I just say, you had me enthralled with your first sentence! The way you set the scene was magnificent I had such a clear image in my head the whole time, it was brilliant. It flowed so well.

Your characterization of Dominique was really well done as well. It's great how you chose her for this since she is well aware that a werewolf bite can change a person.

I can't think of anything bad to say about it, the paragraphs were just the right length, short enough to read through easily, long enough so that nobody is tempted to skip.

The apparition thing confused me , I was thinking 'JUST APPERATE ALREADY, GET OUTTA THERE!'

The only thing I would have done is maybe stopped when she saw the eyes, that would be like a major cruel cliff hanger though!

I really, really hope the rest of this story lives up to this chapter! :D

Feel free to request again!


Author's Response: Hey! Thank you for reading and reviewing.

I am glad you liked the way I set the scene and that you could visualise it and stuff.

I tried my best to portray Dominique the way I see her so it's good to know you liked her characterisation and the fact that I chose her for this.

You can't think of anything bad to say? Omg that made my day. Prose is usually a problem of mine, my sentences sometimes get long winded and I am trying to improve, so your comment is a huge encouragement to me =)

Well, the apparition "mystery" will be solved in future chapters. Poor Dom though.

Well if I stopped at the eyes, my plot for the rest of the chapters would get disturbed xP

I do hope the story lives up to this chapter for you, though I need to warn you now that the rest of the chapters aren't like this. They're more emotional and more concerned with Dom dealing with it all rather than it being action-packed like this one. I hope you like them anyway.

Thank you!

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