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Review:patronus_charm says:
I apologise in advance for this typo-ridden review as it's written on my phone!

Helen's narration meant that there was a lot of refreshing description. It was interesting to see how she viewed the valley of kings in a cynical way, when one would think the opposite way. I know that if I was at such a historically important site I would no doubt be caught up in all the trappings of it. Then again, your comment about her being white and single could be a reason why she appears like that as it could be a natural defence thing.

The merge of historical events such as Helen's comments on mythology and learning the names of the Gods combined with the current ones (well, for the time!) such as Carter's discovery was really great, as it showed exactly why Egypt appeared so magical and appealing to people like me. I think there might have been a typo in the previous chapter however, as it mentioned the Great War of 1816 or something similar and I think you mean the 1900s if Carter is around.

The cultural differences between Moody and Helen were really great to observe, as you played the stereotypes really well with Helen's stiff upper lip and then Moody's swearing. A few questions though. Is Moody a relation of Alastors or can't you say? Also, was his hometown inspired by Glee or a coincidence?

Your descriptions of the tomb and weather were really excellent and blew me away. I could imagine the heat of Egypt perfectly and the debri collected around the tomb and its just great.

Helen's thoughts about her family were also really interesting and it's making me wonder whether she actually will see them again or not and whether they'll have a part in this story. I'm inclined to say yes, and if not, I'm sure that they'll continue to act as a background force.

Great chapter!

Author's Response: It's great to hear that you liked Helen's descriptions - she has been living there for a couple of years (I get fuzzy on the math - she's been in Egypt for 5 years, some of that in Cairo, and some of it here in Thebes and Luxor), so she's able to see past the glamour put forward for tourists. I have to admit that some of that cynicism is my own - it comes naturally when you live too long near a major tourist spot. But to a large degree, you're also right to say that she's being guarded. She is, in spite of herself, equally caught up in the magic of the place, in its history and romance, but she still recognizes the shadowy things that go on behind the scenes.

Yes, it was a typo. This part of the story takes place in December 1922. :)

Moody definitely is a relation of Alastor, though I won't say who just yet (I spoil it in two of my other stories, though...). I didn't know that Lima, OH had any connection to Glee - it's a place I've driven through a couple of times and I just love the sound of the name. Moody takes way too much pleasure from playing a stereotypical American - he is doing it to annoy Helen, I'll admit that much. :P

Thank you again for reading and reviewing! I hope that you enjoy the next chapters too! ^_^


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