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Review:randomwriter says:
Hi there :)

I'll be honest and tell you that I haven;t read too many stories from Neville's POV. This was one of the few and I really did enjoy it :) I think you've written Neville perfectly. Full points for characterisation.

I watched Harry from a distance, laughing and eating. Why couldnít I be more like him? Cool, on the Quidditch team, lots of friends, clever. I was none of that, I never will be.


^ This line seemed like something straight out of Neville's thriteen year old mind. He only seemed to gain a smidge of confidence later on.

As for Snape, I understand why he'd be humiliated, but I was wondering why he'd taken special pains to talk to him alone. I'm sure he's not as unreasonable as to punish him for his fear. Something he can't change.

I think you also got Lupin really well :) His caring nature towards the end and how he stand up for Neville is something I'd definitely expect Lupin to do. So you've written him very well, certainly.

Finally, I really enjoyed the idea behind the story. There are so many lost moments and to take one of those moments and write about them is great! You did have some punctuation issues and a few typos. But that was all! Good story :)

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