Hello! I'm here with your requested review!
First off, I really liked that the tone was very consistent. You didn't jump from kind of depressing prison to happy-go-lucky life.
I like how Walker is in first person, but Rose's flashback is in third, as it gives Walker a bit more intimacy with the reader.
I think the idea that Rose Weasley is the last witch or wizard alive is pretty cool, though I'm wondering how that happened because wizards are everywhere, from Cuba to England to Australia. But nevertheless, the premise is super cool.
The dialogue is clear and easy to follow, so kudos to you ;)
Now for some CC's (I'm sorry now if I seem harsh).
Okay, so first, your characters were pretty believable, but why wouldn't Walker be a little skeptical that Rose isn't some raving lunatic? If she's so dangerous as you've made her out to *seem* (not be, seem), why isn't he afraid of her? And also, why is Rose like that? It seems hard to imagine Hermione Granger's daughter would end up like that, but then again, she apparently used dark magic and went to wizard court, so hopefully that will be cleared up in later chapters.
Next, your character's thinking processes are a little confusing. Example:
"We don't have all day, Ms. Weasley, how do you... ...opened for every other wizard in the world? I saved him. I don't give a damn.
The jump from Rose's thinking to her actual spoken words is extensive, so maybe a little bit more transition?
Also, I'm extremely confused as to why no Weasleys/Potters showed up. Since Hermione and Ron were Harry's best friends, I think he might have shown up at Rose's trial. But, then again, you probably have good reason for that, it's just without a reason, it seems a little strange.
Now for some questions of mine.
Why wasn't Rose surprised at the Head Auror's drive to be Minister for Magic? Where's Hugo? How did Ron and Hermione die?
Just questions I thought of when reading as a reader instead of a reviewer, so be sure to explain those in later chapters.
Lastly, just a suggestion. I absolutely *loved* the prison scene. But, a little description can go a long way. Mention Rose's clothes, the state of her hair, her eyes, anything. Even something about Walker, just to help set the mood even more. But I really really really did like that part. Probably my favorite scene in this chapter.
So good job! I really liked this! Feel free to re-request when slots are open!
Author's Response: Woah, thank you for the feedback :) I honestly did not consider many of the points you mentioned as this chapter's a bit old...
Rose is probably a loony by now haha, and Mr. walker also knows this, but he wants to know about the past so he's willing to take that chance. Not to mention at this point, being the last of her kind, Rose has kind of given up on life so she's not really out to cause mayhem and kill people. Forgive me if that wasn't clear. I'll be sure to fix it. Many of the questions you ask, I can't answer :) but I'm glad you're asking them. Really says a lot about Rose that she's not put off by the Head's ambition, doesn't it?
Ahh description's my worst enemy. I will make the edits. Thank you for the review, friend!