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Review:adluvshp says:
Hey! I noticed your status update that this chapter was up and came to take a look! Needless to say, I wasn't disappointed.

I loved reading about Penelope in Chapter 4, and it was great to see her story again here. She is darker than I thought, very interesting, and quite manipulative I think, but I like her character xD I don't know what she's planning - perhaps to give her husband and his family sheer hell after marriage? But I don't know how she'll do that and I am very curious.

As for Triamour, he actually seems like a nice fellow. I was expecting someone haughty and annoying and very unlikeable so Penelope will hate him even more, but he seems to be quite nice so far and I almost want Penelope to forget her plan and just be with him. Though I am not sure if that is ever going to happen, lol. I look forward to seeing more of him.

I also liked how we saw a slightly nicer side of Penelope's mother. For a moment, during the scene when she comes to take Penelope, she genuinely seemed concerned and I liked it as it felt realistic. I also think that she might have hinted at the curse when talking about "Penelope understanding one day" and "if only you knew". That was interesting and makes me wonder how she knows and what she knows and whether she'll be the one to tell her daughter about it one day or if Penelope will have to find it out for herself.

Your descriptions were as always amazing, and I could visualise Penelope's beauty vividly. I also enjoyed the descriptions of the setting, and the way you presented the scenes. I could almost see it all happening in front of my eyes. I am also enjoying your writing style, it is formal and appropriate for the time the chapters are set in (be it Penelope or Eileen's story), and they make for a nice neat read.

I didn't spot any grammar issues either, and the chapter flowed beautifully over all. I don't have any CC for you, which is no surprise since the story is surely progressing awesomely. I'll keep an eye out for the next chapter!

Great job!
10/10
Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

P.S. Thanks for the little tip about noticing the month and year. I tend to not notice those but I'll keep it in mind from now on xD

Author's Response: Hello Aditi, darling! Thank you so much for stopping by! :)

I'm glad you enjoyed seeing Penelope again. I wasn't sure about writing two different storylines, but I think everyone is really liking it (and so am I!). You are one of the few who has recognized that Penelope is manipulative. And for sheer hell, well, I won't spoil it - just know you're reading the signs very well! Penelope's story is going to go much more quickly than Eileen's, so you will start to connect the pieces soon, I hope.

I love Triamour. I am glad you are giving him a chance and like his character so far. We see everything from Penelope's perspective and to be honest, we should consider her an unreliable narrator.

As humans, we have so many layers and sides to our personalities and identities and so I like exploring many facets of my characters will trying to maintain a sense of cohesion. I think you will find that the "if only you knew" will come out in the most unexpected way. It will be shocking, I hope!

Thank you so much for that! I write the scaffolding of the chapter and then do many revisions so that each is exactly how I want it. I take everything into careful consideration.

Thank you so much for yet another wonderful review! I'm always delighted to hear anything you have to say about my story! Thanks! :)

Shelby


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