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Review:adluvshp says:
Hey! Here for your requested review from the forums. I apologize for the extremely long time it took me to get here but Uni has been crazily busy! Sorry!

I like how you're progressing with the story and developing your characters. I am starting to relate with Ana and I sympathise with her being stuck in the house. A big reason as to why I can connect with her so well is probably your amazing descriptions and imagery. You really know how to explain her inner turmoil using beautiful words =)

The way you explain the scene and the setting is also very good, and helps me visualise the entire thing. I get "caught up" in the story so that's great.

I loved Draco's characterisation too. You have not made him all mushy and nice unlike many other fanfiction writers and yet he is likeable and amusing, and I like that. His interactions with Ana are really fun to read, and I can feel their hidden chemistry already haha. I think they have an interesting relationship and I am excited to see it progress and make the gradual change to friendship and later perhaps something more.

I think the way you wrote the final scene was also nice, and I liked the note the chapter ended on with both of them finding mutual "comfort".

The pace of the story is going good, it's not too rushed and not too slow, and the characterisation as well as their relationship is developing well. I am loving your descriptions too and I am enjoying the story so far. Your plot is headed in a nice direction.

I don't have any CC for you.

Good work!
9/10
Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Hi! And don't worry, I understand completely.

Working with Draco's personality has been difficult and tiresome! I'm so glad that you like what I've done with him. I'm trying to make him a bit more grown up, but he's still a Malfoy and while he's trying to change, there is a side of him he will never be able to change.

I'm glad that their chemistry is detectable. For a moment I was beginning to realize that I didn't do much on the "romantic" side of things for them, and I was hoping in my revisions to change some of that. Glad to see it's working.

Thank you for the nice review! Will definitely re-request soon!


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