Oh my, I'm so super late reviewing this! My apologies, miss!
I think I'll start with my favorite lines, the ones that made me snort or shiver:
"He's so transparent I have to look away in case I start laughing."
"For some reason, this makes me smile, and I have to hide it quickly by stuffing half a kipper into my mouth without regard for how it looks to onlookers." Oh my gawd, I laughed so hard at this mental image!
"...but there is something different about the way she moves..."
I'm thinking either she's super wary due to her bed hangings suddenly catching fire, or somehow she's involved. I hope she's just wary, I really like Erin!
"...enchanted small sparks to outline where it was lying, and they glow dull and red in the morning haze."
*shivers* For some reason, I find this as morbidly fascinating as the rainwater in his mouth part.
Hmm... Thanatos was a minor Greek god of death. And Corrigan makes me think of Morrigan, the Irish "Phantom Queen". Coincidence? I think I'll keep this guy in mind, especially since he just started working with Harry so recently.
Bartleby, what a name! Oh, wasn't that a movie?! I don't remember what it was about..but I seem to remember it coming out all the same.
I love Teddy's profession! So cool and so disturbing that he looks excited in this scene - made me chuckle.
Also, I was inclined to think that the reason Cuffe's dot was unlabeled was because he's dead. But now, with James feeling somewhat worried about it, I'm rather curious and excited to see where you go with it. As of right now, I have no good theories on that one.
Alright, I'm going to stop rambling now before it gets too bad! Can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: I'm SUPER late responding to this, and I apologize very much for that. ♥ It's very shameful, but I'm here now, and I hope you still are too!
I love all of those lines you pointed out. ♥ Reading and responding (late) to all these reviews has really made me remember why I liked writing this story in the first place, and it really makes me want to start again -- I've had a long break, and of course I'd want to start again before NaNoWriMo! But I think this story will continue to come, albeit more gradually than Sneth. I really want this to be a come-what-may sort of story, if that makes any sense at all.
I will clear up that Thanatos's name doesn't mean anything to this story -- but another reviewer caught that too, and I'm super impressed with how observant you guys are! :) I mostly chose that name because it's awesome and a bit funky, and JKR is the queen of funky names. Which is why Bartleby was chosen too! ("Bartleby the Scrivener" is a short story, yes!)
You'll definitely get more information as the story progresses. ;) Thank you so much for reviewing!