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Review:toomanycurls says:
Wow - this is a rather beautiful piece about death and a potential afterlife for James and Lily.

The confusion he starts with is quite well done. I got a good laugh as he replayed pranks he and Sirius had played on each other as adults. ^_^ It made me feel a bit of light-hearted happiness. Aww, I'm sure Moony could get up to some good pranking (but I am glad that he overall did not see Remus as a threat).

His reaction when he starts to figure out that they died. The 'no, no, no' really fits James for some reason I can't quite identify. Maybe it's his personaility, maybe it's his age. I thought his steps to make himself wake up were tragically sad. I love that you manage to weave in humor to a scene. I mean, the part about Lily possibly snoring and the Indian take out got me laughing while the overall story is sad.

You managed his grief at the realization that he's dead quite well. His panic for his family was really well done. It might be good to add a bit of what he'd specifically miss about them. Would he miss seeing his son grow up or growing old with Lily?

This is quite an existential bit of writing. I really like how he starts to go into his holding out to see who will take care of Harry game. My husband and I do that when the cats meow at the door. Ah, the sad realization he has that Sirius will take the blame is horrendously sad. :( His thoughts through that seem quite in line with that I'd expect.

I really like that Lily knows they're dead and that Harry is okay. It's another heartwarming and breaking moment you've captured between them. I like that you've managed to show their love for one another despite them being in a weird dead state.

I'm not sure anyone besides Dumbledore knew who made the prophecy.

Is it because he's in the dead ether that he forgets he realized Peter betrayed him a bit earlier? I'm guessing that's it. His mind seems awfully foggy. I really like that Lily is rather on top of her game and James is kind of stuck in a fog.

Their talk about what would happen to Harry and how he'd grow up is beautiful. I think you've managed to capture what two parents would think through once they realize they're dead. The only thing I'd expect to see more of is grief that they're going to miss out on their son's life and talk through some key events they won't see.

Author's Response: Hi, there!

Aww, that's so nice of you to say! I was rather proud of this one. It was my first foray into Marauders-era.

I wanted to try to build up to the heavy stuff instead of battering the reader with it right away. Taking James through the thought process of trying to decide whether he'd been pranked seemed like a good way to easy into thing. And I'm sure Moony did have his moments.

For me, most of James's reaction boiled down to the fact that he would have had a hard time accepting it was possible. Like he says, he's James Potter. Throughout his life, he's always come out on top in the end. And now he's lost everything. Coming to grips with that would have been a big step for him.

I've played that "holding out" game quite a few times with my wife when our boys were small. And I think the realization about Sirius was one of the sadder aspects of the story.

Since this is all told from James's perspective, I think Lily probably comes off as a little more put together and sure of herself than she was actually feeling, but I don't mind that. She does have better insight into these emotional moments than he does. It's just in her nature.

The conversation about who would raise Harry was the saddest part of all for me. What they're thinking about Harry's future would have made a lot of sense to them because they don't really understand what's happened. If Voldemort was truly gone, there would have been no reason to send Harry to the Dursleys.

I'm really glad you enjoyed the story. Thanks for reading and reviewing!


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