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Review:patronus_charm says:
Ah, I saw you on the review tag and I couldn’t resist coming and reading some of your work as it’s been ages! If, at any time (probably most of the time…), this review is incoherent I apologise being a massive fan of Ancient Egypt and all the pharaohs it will probably lead to me squealing far too much!

Even though Ankhesenamun’s appearance was really short, your characterisation of her in that space of time was amazing. Her love for her husband was so true with the way she wanted to die so she could still be with him, then the innocence of that wish and acting rashly with grief was excellent and all the layers of her emotions were tied together excellently. She had this wonderful regal air about her with not crying and keeping her composure which was a really lovely addition to her characterisation.

The way you use old terms such as Vizier and relating it to the afterlife and their belief in it constantly was really excellent. It just painted this wonderfully vivid image of their society and how the hierarchy of it was so important. I really enjoyed reading the sections when Ankhesenamun almost bemoaned the fact that she and Tutankhamen weren’t going to get a proper burial with all the jewels and treasures as it showed what an important part of their life it was.

Ay was another fantastic addition to the story! He was an excellent villain – the type which you instantly dislike and he provoked so many angry emotions in me it really showed why. I also liked how you put emphasis on him being superior to her despite she being the surviving wife to the pharaoh showing what position women held and it will be interesting to juxtapose it to your MC in the present day as she’s a girl.

It’s a shorter review than usual (well, for me :P), but I can’t wait to carry on reading! ♥

-Kiana

Author's Response: I really can't imagine any of your reviews being incoherent, Kiana! It's lovely of you to snatch up my story from the review swap thread, and even lovelier that you've reviewed so much of this story! I'm sorry that I've taken so long to respond to your reviews - but I have read them all a few times, enjoying the story again through your eyes. ^_^

Hearing the compliments of a character who appears so briefly is wonderful! It's great to hear that her personality came through with such strength - she doesn't appear again for a while, but her legacy and presence do permeate through the text (and I've also found a way to give her a role further on. It's different from my original plan for her, but it's more plausible and requires a lot less finangling with the rules of the magical world). She's also an example of a "strong female character" - although she feels powerless, she is still able to enact a certain power and do what is necessary to protect herself in her now precarious position. It's something many of the female characters in this story have to deal with.

Wow, you've picked up some fantastic details from the chapter - things that I hadn't remembered or noticed were there. You've really demonstrated how the prologue doesn't only introduce the ancient magical elements that are important to the plot, but also - and more importantly - the underlying themes of hierarchy, systems of belief, and gender roles. It's fantastic! Thank you very much for pointing them out! :D


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