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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hey Grace! I hope your media assignment is going well :)

I thought the opening dream scene was really excellent! The description in it were really powerful and added to the action of it really well creating great imagery. Then Dracoís thoughts were really authentic and believable manipulating them to add to the dream scene really well. Now Iím wondering whether this is going to act as a sort of prophecy for the future or whether itís just a dream. Hmm, a great thought-provoking start!

At times, like here ĎHis sheets were mussed, which he grabbed for, shuddering at the cold temperature of his bedroom.í I got a little confused with the wording. I get what you mean but if you reworded it such as Ďhe grabbed for his mussed up sheets, shuddering at the cold temperature of his bedroomí it makes for an easier reader as there arenít so many separate clauses which can confuse the readers at times.

Dracoís thoughts following the dream scene were great. I really liked how he was reflecting on the change of relationship between him and Hermione and actually acknowledged after change had happened unlike before which happens in a hell of a lot of Dramiones! The part in which he reflected about Bellatrix was really great too as it reminded us of his roots, something, again, is often forgotten. If you continue to do that now and then it will be great!

One suggestion though, when Hermione and Draco both refer to them enjoying each otherís company and the conversation being great I would perhaps include a memory of that happening. It would just make their change in stance more real and relatable. It could be something as simple as the way they agreed on some transfiguration principle or whatever.

I liked the way you made Hermione battle with her feelings with a logical air. The way she contemplated definitions of words really made me chuckle as it was so like her and made it so real in that respect. You just kept her character is what Iím really trying to say, but you somehow managed to reflect that change in her too.

The dialogue between them at the end was great! I like the light mocking air to it as I expected awkward silences after what they both thought, but I was greeted by a pleasant surprise. I canít wait to see what Blaise and Pansy are going to be like though, as I canít half think that they might be worse.

Great chapter, and feel free to re-request!

-Kiana

Author's Response: Hi Kiana! Thank you so much for your review! I am so so sorry that it has taken me so long to respond, life is so busy! Hope your German presentation is going good :)

Ahh yay, you got the exact idea i was going with with the dream, this has mad me very very happy!!! So which one.. is it a dream or a prophecy? Oo :P

Yes, i did realize how badly that sentence sounded, I had my lovely beta clear that up when she did her read-through, in which i was very grateful :)

I wanted to make Draco as authentic as possible. Too many people have him being this mysterious guy who dramatically changer overnight by Hermione's love, and that is not the basis that I am going for. I want him to change himself. I'm glad this reflects :D

I considered putting in some memories, your not the first person to bring it up, so maybe i should look into it :D Its a good idea.

Hermione is logical, and that perceives a lot that goes on in the story as it goes along. I am trying to keep her in canon as possible. She is probably my hardest character to write. I am glad i am doing well so far!

Hehe, I am trying to keep them civil, and not awkward to show that there is progress. Hope its working!

Can't wait to see what you think of my next chapter i hugely value your reviews, they are extremely helpful!

Thank you again Kiana :D

Grace :)


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