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Review:shez says:
SO, umm, can I just say that I'm REALLY struggling to find criticism for this? Seriously, I can't think of ANYTHING that might improve genius that you've written.

I'm SO a fan of these philosophical character studies so I don't know how this story seemed to evade me. I really enjoyed reading this. As the character of Lily, James have never fully been established by canon, I usually don't care what writers do with them--but I think THIS is probably what Lily would be like. You have a great talent for incorporating the otherwise forgotten details (i.e. Lily and Petunia's relationship--how it makes her sad. I thought this was a great touch.) Beautiful evocation of feelings. Great writing style. Fantastic characterizations. I won't pretend to find flaws with this otherwise flawless piece. I particularly liked this part:

"It wasnít uncertainty of James being the right man, a doubt of his love, or her love for that matter. This was a promise that could not be unmade. She did not see her love wavering in the foreseeable future, but what about the unforeseeable future? Would their love stand the test of time or would it wither in 15 years? Had their love grown organically or because of extraneous stress that pushed them together? Lily had said yes and meant it with all her heart but that did not eradicate her anxiety. "

This really brings in an interesting element of doubt--one I think is very relatable and human. Maybe it is the (overlooming) war and the possibility of death that heightens their affections. Maybe they are a product of the conditions of their environment? Are James and Lily truly in LOVE or is it FEAR? Which is the greater motivator? Very interesting questions and If you wanted, you could go further with them by taking an alternative stance and just BLOW the mind of your readers (never mind, you would get a lot of angry fangirls).

So I think this story is fantastic and definitely my type :). Feel free to rerequest. Maybe in the future I might have something more substantial for you than gushing.

Author's Response: Hi Shez!!

I am absolutely beside myself at your kind words. This is my first work that is more on the philosophical side than just being a narrative. It's incredibly awesome that I've been able to help define how you see James and Lily (I quite often agree that people can take a great deal of liberty with them as characters).

I put a lot of my own fears around getting married into this story (Lily's fear followed a conversation my husband and I had before we got married). I really thought about playing with the idea of whether their love was artificially hurried by the worries of war but I did fear for my safety if I wrote something like that (haha). I am very glad that her fear seemed extremely human and realistic to you. ^_^

It's so very awesome that you liked this (a lot). I'll definitely re-request to get your opinion on my chapter about James!!

Thank you so much - a bit of gushing always does my heart good. :D

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