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Review:marauderfan says:
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I liked this chapter! Your portrayal of Snape and Lily as kids is really adorable, and you've captured that childhood friendship so well. They'll get annoyed at each other, but at the end of the day they're still best friends and enjoy playing on the swings together. It's cute. And it's evident how much hope Snape has that everything will work out for him and Lily. :( I almost feel sorry for him.

You have some lovely descriptions of the setting in here too - I loved the line about the cherry trees and a haze of pinks and greens, it was such a pretty image.

The only thing I think might help the chapter would be some sort of tie-in to Harry's reading it. Since it's supposed to be Snape's diary, a few lines in the beginning about Harry opening the journal might be nice, or something to tie it into the previous chapter. Or a bit more of Snape's thoughts, so the reader is reminded that it's his story. Anyway, really well done - great work! :)

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