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Review:randomwriter says:
Hello :)
Here from Review Tag!

First up, I LOVE this idea that you've got going. Fear is one of the most basic emotions, and no matter how brave we are, we all have at least one thing we fear. We have at least that one moment of fear and I love how you picked that up and wrote a story from it.

Second of all, the idea behind this particular chapter was also lovely :) It's quite a realistic fear to have. I mean, to promise you life to someone, no matter how much you love them, makes you think. I liked how you made it clear that it wasn't marrying James that she was afraid of, it was the idea of marriage itself. That was the root problem.

I love Jily and I really enjoyed reading this fic. I'm glad that you didn't undermine the darkness in the world that they lived in. It made this more realistic and gave better background because it is natural that such things will always strike us. Whether we deserve the right to happiness when people are dying all around us, and such. Hence, Lily's thought process really appealed to me and I think you wrote her very well :)

Another character I simply loved was Mrs Evans. The dialogue between her and Lily and her thoughts on marriage were lovely. I also felt that she was very well written. This motherly feel oozed out of that short part of the fic.

I liked the simplistic proposal too. And how there was certainty and hope in their lives even in those times. I do think the encounter with Voldemort would have reminded James about the transient nature of life and might have prompted him to solidify his relationship with Lily as soon as possible. Thought I liked the proposal, a little bit of extravagance wouldn't hurt. Considering that it is James :P however, to each his own. It depends on how you see James. I liked it though :)

Overall, I really enjoyed this. I think you've done a great job :P

Author's Response: Hi!!!

I'm so glad you picked this for your review tag. ^_^ aah, I'm quite happy you like the theme. It seemed like a great story to write during October. This has been a great exercise in analyzing characters.

Lily's fear gave me a bit of worry to write about. I am glad it was clear that it was marriage, not James that made her feel fear. ^_^ I didn't want to pop any Jily bubbles out there.

It's amazing to get such good feedback from a Jily fan. I've never tried to write about them before so it's good to hear I captured them in a satisfying way to a die-hard fan. :D

Mrs. Evans was a joy to write. I kind of go gooey over the motherly love stuff - it's great to hear that it worked well for the story.

I think that the proposal would have been more extravagant if Voldemort hadn't been the catalyst for proposal I think there would have been a more romantic/lush date planned. (In my head James had been planning on proposing but abandoned the plan and did it faster but less romantically).

Thank you so much for this review. I really appreciated your words of encouragement and thoughts on James. I may try to sneak in a bit about his proposal being an improv and deviation from his first plan.


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