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Review:academica says:
Hello, here with your requested review! First off, let me issue you an apology - I had a major thesis deadline last week and I was unable to devote any free time to HPFF. Anyway, here I am, and I really appreciate your patience :)

This was certainly an interesting story. I really liked how you highlighted the friendly, welcoming atmosphere of Hufflepuff House. I also liked seeing the contrast between a full common room and the emptiness of the holiday periods, which was really augmented by the description of how the common room missed helping the students.

The only thing that I think could be improved here is the clarity. It was hard for me to pin down who the speaker was; at first I thought it was Helga, then maybe Professor Sprout or the Fat Friar, and finally I figured out it was the common room itself. Part of that, I think, was the fact that the room kept talking about looking at different facets of itself, like the walls and the fireplace. You might consider making this third person instead to avoid some of the confusion--unless the suspense is intentional, of course :)

Otherwise, nice job! It's definitely a unique concept with pretty good execution and it'll be interesting to see what you do in terms of the short story collection.

Nice work! Hope this review is helpful, and thanks for requesting!

-Amanda

Author's Response: Hi Amanda! Oh, it's no problem at all - college(?) definitely comes first, and I hope your thesis went well! I apologize for the delay in responding too, sorry!

I remember being disappointed that JKR never included the Hufflepuff common room in the books, so I decided to write about it myself. This one-shot was originally started in third person, but it didn't feel natural to me, so I switched to first person with the intention of revealing that it was the common room at the end. (I mean, if the castle has suits of armour that come to life and staircases that move, then why can't common rooms be sentient? :P) I've taken on board your comments though, and I'll keep them in mind when working on the future chapters :)

Your review was definitely helpful indeed; thank you for reviewing!

-Isobel


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