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Review:toomanycurls says:
Aw, I hope she's not losing hope. :( It kind of sounds like she is at the beginning.

I really like the bit about evil never dying because there's always someone else who will take up the mantle.

It's nice to see Imogen talk herself into writing as an aspiration (though Rita Skeeter doesn't seem like a person who sugar coats her stories).

You describe being in and out of consciousness really well. It's engaging and doesn't go off into a existential, hard to follow, spiral. I'm happy that Malfoy is coming to help her (I hope that's what he's really up to). Shadow figure is a good name for the weird Voldemort spirit thing. It's a good ominous name that doesn't sound ridiculous.

Who/what is Liana? (Did I miss something previously or will that be explained later?)

Is Imogen a leglimens? I don't recall that from earlier. It's not a common skill (but if her family is a super cool Holy Grail saving clan I could see them having extra powers)

It seems a bit fast for Imogen to go from indifferent to Malfoy betraying her to fed up with not getting the truth from him when she stomps her foot while they're outside.

Interesting that too much magic would attract people. Is that because they're on the run or because they're in a muggle house?

ooh, I like the introduction of an immortal into the HP world. I really appreciated the information from Draco about Yaxley and why his family is entangled with him. I didn't think they quite turned a new leaf but it was eating at me that they were right back into being evil again.

I like that the chapter ended on a positive note. It was nice to see Draco and Imogen together and a get a bit of insight to Draco's motivations throughout the story.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing!

Looking back on it now, I probably should go back and edit a few chapters so that I can parts of the story less confusing. Like the character or Liana for example. (She was the woman seated with Yaxley at the table in chapter two). Quite a lot of my chapters need editing because I always tend to skip important information and end up waffling about less important stuff.

My main focus right now is to try an build up a more realistic relationship between Draco and Imogen, it might not be a completely positive one from the word go but hopefully I'll get there in the end!

Thank you so much for taking the time to reviewing and agreeing to the review swap!

Bella x

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