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Review:patronus_charm says:
Yay! I think I squealed a little too much when I saw you had updated this story!

This line Ė í Penelope is the stolen Persephone to my humble earth, the eternal prisoner of a faceless Hades to leave me brittle and cold, bringing her light and warmth into the depths of the underworld. Ď just ♥ ♥ All those analogies about Penelopeís death were fantastic and really conveyed the strong emotion Verity must have been feeling.

The structure of the section related to Verityís anger at Sebastian was great! The whole day to day layout of it sort of represented how monotonous had begun and the rhythm of things had never really changed. The small facts such as Verity doing yoga and Sebastian caring about stock prices showed how much they differed with Verity seeming to search for a meaning of life whereas Sebastian merely lived it. You just highlighted their differences in a really beautiful way!

Your description of Muggle and magical London was really great and added so much! I know itís only minor here as Iím in a bit of a rush but I really loved it and it added so much to the scene! You just captured Muggle London brilliantly and got the spirit of it which is the thing about it that I loved the most.

The mention of Fred and George was great as they havenít cropped up in a while and I wonder how long it will take for Verity to get closer to the pair of them. The mentions from Sebastian was an ingenious thing on your behalf as it will allow them to feature more in an innocuous way.

The small things in this chapter were great. I have a few things vying to be the favourite currently, the mentions of their neighbours and the shouting from them, the bookshop scene with the maps and then the old man looking for Borgin. They were just tired together effortlessly and really tied in with the theme of collecting and memories as the mish mash of these things arenít ones you would forget easily.

An amazing chapter :D

-Kiana

Author's Response: Hi! :D You are so sweet! It has definitely been too long since I've updated this, and I'm glad you didn't forget about it!

Aw, I'm really glad you liked those lines. Sometimes I worry they seem a bit over the top, but Verity always seems to come out with these analogies and poetic language.

I'm also pleased you liked the anger between them and how their relationship gets repetitive: I tried to think of little things that would annoy me as well! I'm glad you thought it highlighted their differences as well: they are very different people with different outlooks on the world and how they live their lives, and I think you just described that perfectly here in this review.

Can you tell that I have a slight obsession with London? :$ I went there so many times when traveling and now the only way I can really visit it is through my stories, which I adore doing. :) I'm so happy you think I got the spirit of Muggle London across: thank you! :D

Yes, they didn't seem to want to make an appearance in this chapter but definitely will in the next. I thought Verity would squirm a little after Seb mentioned them, hehe.

I love those small scenes and details too! The alley with the maps actually is a real place in London and I hope I did it justice, it's such a cool spot! I also loved writing that story with the old man and adding in little stories and ideas Verity collects, it makes this story so diverse and exciting to write.

Thank you so much for this amazing review! :D


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