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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hey Rose, back again through review tag!

I really loved the emphasis on Lilyís relationship with Petunia in this chapter for a few reasons. The first being simply that itís often forgotten in fanfiction but the way you highlighted it here was really great as we got to understand more about Lilyís feelings towards on her in such a momentous day. The mentions of Vernon and James made me chuckle! Then the way you would think she should think about her as she is her sister and their strange relationship has always interested me. I almost wish she had come along as it would have been interesting.

Also the emphasis on the dark life such as Order members dying and her thoughts about Voldemort were very appropriate as it highlighted the fact her life wasnít all that great. The subtle mentions towards her age also added a lot as it showed how much she was going through at such a young age which was really shocking.

The uncertainty about marrying James was great as it was shown in both the flashback with her quiet voice and Jamesí suddenness in asking and with her mother. It was nice to see how well you carried it through and I thought that her doubts about the marriage were very realistic because it was very rushed when you think about it.

One minor thing, you said Mrs. Evans a lot, I would suggest mixing it up with her mum or Lilyís mum just for some variation.

The talk with her mum was really lovely and heart-warming and I like how you can always go to your mum to sort things out and then just feel so much better. The brief cameo from her dad made me smile and I thought it was a really touching story that I liked a lot. Iíll try and make it back for some more if life allows me too!


Author's Response: Hi Kiana!!

I'm glad you picked this for the review tag!!

When I wrote this I tried to think of everything horrible in Lily's life at the time and wanted to at least touch on those things. I'm so glad the Petunia bit worked well (and that Vernon's small part made you laugh). I want to describe that scene in more detail but it doesn't really add to the main point of this story. Still considering it though.

I was worried that I didn't frame her fear right but it sounds like my message came across how I meant it to be interpretted. Their marriage always did seem rushed to me and I wonder how they would have lasted without dying in the war before they could really take their marriage out for a spin.

Thanks for pointing out the repitition of Mrs. Evans. I'll vary that up when I edit this next.

^_^ I really liked writing the conversation between Lily and her mum. I got a lot of good feels from writing it. It's great to hear that you liked the convo and the brief interlude from her dad (I meant him to be a bit of comedic releif).

The next part is quite a bit different - I hope it comes across your path! (if not I might request ^_^)

Your review was really awesome. Thank you so much for taking the time to review!


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