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Review:MissesWeasley123 says:
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Whoa. Snape, Astoria, Horatio, McGonagall, Draco, and Lucius all in one chapter?

Seriously. I'm mad with this chapter, but I'm also happy. I think I've gone mental. Let me explain:

Isadore. Don't like her at all. I don't know why.. I just don't find her very trustful, and I think she's going to be one of those super jealous friends that ruin everything for you. The way she was talking to Astoria.. Something was giving me warning signs. Maybe she was pushing it a bit more than just "teasing". Grr - she better stay away from them!

I was crying, "No, no, no!" when her father was forbidding her to talk to Draco. I understand but stupid parents - always ruining everything. :(

Snape as portrait was genius. Thank you for having that in there. You actually wrote his dialogue so well, really. It was perfect. It was very "Snape like" and the last bit he said to Astoria was so shaking and deep. Brilliantly done. It really made you think about the idea of "evil". It reminded me a lot about The Lion King... because certain characters in that weren't necessarily evil, but more like their actions were evil. You weren't really saying the exact same thing, but it really got me thinking. Your chapters always do, and that's what the best pieces make you do. They make you think.

Lucius is very aggravating. I hate him. Hate him so so much. He should just get sent back to Azkaban. The whole "Death Eater's trying to resurface" idea is very concerning. I really hope it doesn't happen, because that'll shatter everything for Draco. I'm so proud of him for standing up to him though.

Correction: Lucius should not be sent to Azkaban, but locked up in a mental ward in St. Mungos and put in a straight-jacket.

I'm really enjoying this story so far, I love what you have to tell about them. It's really amazing.

Author's Response: Must stop being a slug and answer reviews. Must stop being a slug and answer reviews.

I really liked this chapter for exactly that reason. There's a little bit of everything in this one. And it has quite a lot of strong emotions, so I can definitely see how you'd feel happy and mad. I'm just pleased that it made an impact.

I find that there isn't much "in between" when it comes to readers and Isadore. They either adore her or hate her. I think of her as "that friend" that most of us have when we're Astoria's age. "That friend" who's always enthusiastic and supportive but also has a lot of bad ideas and dubiously reliable information. In this chapter she's helpful to Astoria because she becomes sort of a mirror in which Astoria can see some of her own bad tendencies.

Astoria's father really does want what's best for her, it's just that his ideas of "what's best" are not very similar to what Astoria wants for herself. He's not a bad guy, he's just a product of his upbringing, which occurred in a very different time and place.

In my original outline, Dumbledore's portrait was supposed to talk to Astoria, but I realized that the two of them didn't have much in common. Then I thought of Snape. He was sort of a natural for the part. And he has a good point. I'm really glad you liked him, because he was a lot of fun to write.

There's no doubt that Lucius was acting like a complete idiot in this chapter. I'd only ask that you withhold judgment on him until his entire story comes out. There's a little more going on with him than Draco realizes. All in good time...

I'm incredibly pleased that you like the story. Thanks so much for all of your feedback and support!


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