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Review:MissesWeasley123 says:
Okay, reviewing two chapters in one.. let's see how I do..

I really like these flashbacks/memories/mind reading stuff Tor's goes through. They all are very interesting, and really add to the plot. Sometimes I wonder whether you're doing certain ones on purpose.. or if these all relate to each other.

TERRY! ♥ ... I love him. But, just a quick question: If he's a Muggleborn, then when he went to Hogwarts during his Seventh year, while Harry, Ron, and Hermione were horcrux hunting, he shouldn't have been allowed to, right? Because he's a Mugllebron? And no Muggleborns were allowed to attend Hogwarts during that year? But if you changed that to make it fit with your story, I don't mind at all - forget I ever said it lol.

But seriously. Tor and Terry.

EVEN THEIR NAMES SOUND GOOD TOGETHER!

Nadia and Terry not so much. *sigh* I really adore him though, absolutely love him. Gorilla is very annoying. KILL HER.

No seriously, kill her. She sucks.

You described Tor's guilt so well. I think you did it wonderfully, because at that moment, not only was Tor feeling guilty, I was too. I could feel her guilt and yeah. Very vivid and realistic.

A great two chapters as always!

Author's Response: Hola!

I'm glad you like the flashbacks! I feel like they're really important to round Tor out and explain why she is the way she is, and also to give her father a more rounded character even when he's not directly present in the action. They mostly have indirect or direct connections with the action, or foreshadow something in the future- foreshadowing is the best. :P

Ah I'm so glad you picked up on that! When I picked Terry to be the mystery boy I was traveling and didn't have access to the HP books, and hp wiki didn't inform me about that little fact of his blood status. But when DH rolls around (in the far, far away future), I actually figured out a cool plot to fit that in and it will help drive the story onwards in an interesting way!

Haha, I swear only in talking to a writer is it ok for someone to say "kill her" and the writer to think "yeah, I wish I could!" She does suck. :P

I'm glad you could feel Tor's guilt too! :)

Thank you for another wonderful review my dear!


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