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Review:MargaretLane says:
Love the language of the first two paragraphs. Good use of imagery.

You have also managed to give us the impression of what is going on, while still keeping us in suspense as to the details. I am guessing his wife is dying and he will have to raise his daughters alone, but exactly what's happened to her is still a mystery.

One mistake I've noticed. You've misspelled "coma" as "comer". Unless you're trying to show us the doctor's accent.

Hmm, I wonder what he means by he suffered enough in the past. He's probably just referring to living through the war and the abuse perpetrated his last year at Hogwarts, but there could be more to it.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing! Much appreciated! (especially your corrections)
You've also given me more to think about and build on :)
thanks again!

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