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Review:Haronione says:
Hi, here for the review battle :)

I was intrigued to read this as just lately I have developed an affinity to Regulus stories, I'm not sure why but I have. This was quite different to the other stories I have read about him recently; i've never read about him with a love interest. I liked how you showed a different side to him, a softer side.

I also loved your different take on Mary MacDonald. She is usually portrayed as a quiet, timid person (in the fics I've read anyway) so it was nice to see her being the complete opposite.

This was a great portrayal of someone mourning the loss of someone they loved and I really liked the idea that he is narrating this through a letter. This was a touching piece and there were a few lines that really stuck out to me. This one ' much it goddamn hurts, not just that you're gone, but that I wasnít enough for you to stay for.' How sad for Regulus to feel like that, but of course one would feel like this if a loved one has taken their own life. And this one 'They say eventually you reach acceptance, but it seems unlikely to me.' how true that someone in the grieving stage would think like this, how could they see an end to their grief when they are hurting so much?! And then the last two lines - I think they were the perfect end to this fic :)

I felt you explored the motions of grief very well here. I really felt for Regulus in this as he had no-one to help him through his grief as he would have had to hide it from others due to the secretive nature of his and Mary's relationship. Poor Regulus! I really liked how you included his becoming a death eater in this. It gives a good explanation of why he joined them and a possible reason for why he turned against Voldemort too - I see it that (from your story of him) Regulus joined the Death Eaters in the anger stage of his grief, to get back at Mary for leaving him. Then, when he had reached the acceptance stage he could see that he was wrong and wanted to avenge Mary's death, in his own way. What I'm trying to say is that this is a great portrayal of Regulus's motivations - and a very unique portrayal too!

On the whole this was very well written but I did notice a few rather long, run on sentences. Maybe just revise these and break the sentences down a bit.

This was a lovely little one-shot and I enjoyed reading it. I look forward to reading more from you :)

Haronione ♥

Author's Response: Ahh, thank you so much for this lovely review! I'd actually never really read anything about Regulus before starting this fic but now, like you, I've started to really like stories about him. I'm glad you think my portrayal of him was unique! I did really try to show his softer side here even though he is a death eater :)

I love when people quote favourite parts of the fic omg. Thanks! I'm so glad you liked it. I was trying a pretty different style to what I usually write here, which was writing about a serious topic in a 'teenage' kind of way, so I'm glad you think it worked in those parts.

When I was writing this I was trying to think of a way to link it to canon more, because it seemed like it had just kind of come out of nowhere, so I started thinking about what we know about Regulus in canon, and all we really know about is his involvement with the death eaters, so that's why I decided to put that part in. I thought it would be interesting to find another motivation for Reg joining them other than 'hes evil' or 'hes a slytherin' like a lot of fics seem to do, so I'm really glad you thought my explanation was good, and unique!

Oh my god, I'm ridiculous with run on sentences, it's awful. I went through this several times trying to break them down but clearly I wasn't too successful, haha. I'm like that in all my writing - it's a regular occurrence that a whole paragraph will be one sentence. My beta hates me. Next time I get the motivation for editing I will definitely keep that in mind, thanks!

I'm glad you liked it, and thanks for the lovely review < 3


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