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Review:Lululuna says:
Hi! Ah, it's been too long since I've reviewed, I'm sorry! This story is just as wonderful as ever. As a note on the last chapter, I died when poor Edie found out Jae's real age. Then cringed. Then laughed. Then died again. I love how you write these incredibly awkward and hilarious scenes: Edie just seems so real to me, and I love reading about her misadventures. To an extent, they make my own seem not so bad!

This was a great chapter too (as always!). Edie's swaggering into the pub was great, and I loved the note from the guys. And Oliver and Edie are so cute! It was hilarious when she was trying so hard to keep her distance, like hanging onto his uniform to avoid touching him when flying. Any other girl would have loved the typical opportunity to cuddle up on a broom and be cute and couply, but only Edie could turn that moment into something incredibly awkward yet real.

Hmm, what is Rose up to? The moment when Edie thought she was about to strangle her then realized she was hugging her was hilarious. I was pretty surprised too, though I guess it was all an act for Oliver.

Ah, I cringed again for Edie when she was having that talk with Katie. I wonder if Oliver ever will read the article, and how that might shake things up. It's such a strange dynamic between all these characters, what with Katie and Oliver being exes, and Rose and Oliver dating (ugh) and Edie and Oliver and their strange chemistry... ah! I honestly have no idea what is going to happen, and that's a good thing.

The line: "how many people has she thrown under the Knight bus?" was hilarious.

I think you wrote the Quidditch match really well. It was vivid, but also didn't drag on, and it was funny to see Edie get more and more... excited. Oh, Edie, of course you had to lose control and distract Oliver. The idea of a mob chasing her and the image of her being the lone Kenmare fan in a sea of Puddlemere is both silly and worrying.

This was such a perfect chapter my dear, and well worth the wait! :) I'm already looking forward to the next update!

Author's Response: Hello again! ♥

Yes, writing Edie's misadventures was largely started as a way to make myself feel less awkward, haha. And I suppose I was trying to make fun of the broom ride trope? I was wary to put it in this chapter, because it can be very cliche (we've seen it in film/literature with horseback and motorcycles and now brooms!) But I'm glad that you found it sufficiently awkward ;3

Yes, what *is* Rose up to? I hope her freindly reaction to Edie came as a bit of a surprise!

I know, these character dynamics--agghhh! I'm trying very hard to keep it from being a love-quadrangle, but it's very difficult. At least you're unsure of what will happen, haha.

Thanks so much! I really was worried about the Quidditch match. I considered writing it in a JKR-esque style, where the whole thing is just described through the commentator's narration--and even considered having Lee Jordan be a professional commentator! But I didn't think I could do that AND explain the turn-of-events with Kenmare trying to secretly score one final point before catching the Snitch.

"Both silly and worrying." Ahh! Yay! I'm so happy it came across that way :D I wanted Edie causing Puddlemere to lose to be like what is apparently called the "Steve Bartman incident." If you aren't familiar, you should look into it. It's insane how furious people were with him--and still are. Kind of funny.

Anyway, thank you very much for another lovely review. The next chapter is slowly but surely coming together ♥


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