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Review:MC_HK says:
Hi!

This was a well written chapter! I really enjoyed some of the more funny moments between Lexi and the Gryffindor team, and she has a very fiery attitude that I find entertaining. It's also very good to see what's going on in the Ravenclaw team, because establishing group dynamic is always important.

Hmm.. I'd have to say, I kind of think the emotion of this is kind of scattered. It's good, and you convey it well. I do think that Lexi and Dumbledore could have had that conversation somewhere else other than the Great Hall, though. Even though it's pretty empty, Lexi seemed pretty determined to keep her situation hush hush, and Amos was there along with a few other students. So that to me seemed like a minor inconsistency to me. Your OC also seems very aggressive, slapping Lily at the end like that and speaking her mind. Not my style, but I won't lie, she's very bold and has a strong personality, which is very good in my book! I'm interested to see what is up with her family and her past!

You also have minor issues like tense problems. I didn't find too many grammar issues, but your tense issues really stand out.

Good show! -- MC_HK

Author's Response: Hi!
1. Yeah, I'm having problems with the Dumbledore and Lexi scene. :S Not going well.
The Lily thing has yet to be explained, but my version of Lily is that she's a bit of a gossip. The tense issues are also something I need to sort out. I've heard about that a lot.
2. Thanks so much!
This was really helpful!
MT:)


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