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Review:Elphaba and Boyfriends says:
Hello, Elphaba here!

Wow, this chapter is certainly explosive! I was happy to see the big showdown between Dom and her boss. Delilah is really nuts, I think.

I was a little confused, though, about Delilah's "cabin" where the big confrontation takes place. Is a cabin the same as a cubicle or office? Both cabin and office are mentioned during the scene, so I wasn't site whether it was a mistake or not.

I noticed a few mechanical issues, a couple of them in this sentence: "All color drained off Delilah's face for a moment as she looked at the three men, before she rearranged her expression into one of politely confused." Instead of "drained off," I think "drained from" would work better. I think Delilah's expression would also be one of "polite confusion."

Finally, one nit picky spelling thing, in "pensive" should be "pensieve." My autocorrect thinks it should be pensive, so that's probably what happened there. :)

I like that Delilah plays innocent at first, and puts up a fight against the charges. I think the threat I the verity serum must have been what really caused her to panic and slip up.

It's also really good to see that Dom sees hope for herself at the end of the chapter. :)

Author's Response: Hey! It's always a pleasure to hear from you.

I am pleased you liked the chapter, and the big "showdown". Delilah is definitely nuts haha.

Cabin is the same as a cubicle/office yeah. In my country, we often refer to an office/cubicle/workspace as a cabin (in English) but maybe it's not a popular word everywhere else.

Thanks for pointing out that little sentence phrasing issue there. English is not my native language so I tend to make mistakes like these often, so thank you for pointing it out, I can now fix it =)

Uh yeah I think my autocorrect did that, lol. I'll go back and edit.

Yeah the veritaserum sure caused her panic. I am glad you liked the way she reacted. I am pleased you liked the end as well.

Thank you!


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