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Review:MrsJaydeMalfoy says:
Hey there, dear!

First off, let me say CONGRATULATIONS for winning Featured Story!! :) And now, on to your review!

I really like the way you've got things set up here. It's the start of a brand new year, and we're getting to know each of the girls as they make their way to Hogwarts. It's just a normal, start-of-the-year chapter, except for ONE tiny detail... the suspense.

There were a couple of times throughout the chapter where I got the feeling that something's coming... sort of like foreshadowing. The one that stood out to me most was when you said the castle felt colder; it was very subtle and just awesome!

I like your characterizations; each of the girls clearly has their own personality! Overall, this is a great first chapter, and I'm eager to read more! Well done!

Author's Response: Thanks!

I'm glad you liked the beginning of this. It's slow I know and I think it may be too slow but i'm glad you picked up on the suspense. I didn't want to make it massively obvious and have aliens coming down and hitting them over the head or something. I wanted it to be a little more subtle where things seem okay at first glance, but really, things are anything but that.

Thank you so much for your lovely review :)


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