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Review:Leonore says:
This is a really nice story, well written with a good plot. The Quidditch scenes are excellent - for some reason I struggle with writing that kind of action. I find it easier to concentrate on people, so I admire authors who can come up with a good imaginative plot like this and consider the relationships between so many people. And your original characters are well developed. Although the formal apologising thing gets a little repetitive and not entirely realistic, it suits the story. And the situation with the small House adds an original and interesting twist.

Well done for keeping the House point situation reasonable and pretty consistent. It is good that you've set 20 points as being a lot and are keeping that consistent. Although the "you just saved two people's lives, have a few house points" always seems to trivialise the rescue/big up the House point system too much. But that happens rather more in the original books.

Brilliant story; I have your sequels on my reading list so I will move on to them when I next have time.

Leonore

Author's Response: Thanks very much. The Quidditch scenes, as I think you probably realise from trying to write them, are a real pain to script as you need to strike the balance between the narrative, plot and the game itself. The trick is to have as little actual Quidditch as possible happen.

Sorry about the apologies ;-) ... fair point, though, I did try to make them varied, and it is somewhat relevant for the plot. There isn't too much of it in the sequel. Honest. Only a little bit, but you need it after you have a fight.

Hope you enjoy the sequels - Snake Bites is nearly finished!


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