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Review:loveinidleness says:
Such an immersive start to this piece. Your description is divine but what I particularly love is that you donít let it take over the story. We donít have three paragraphs of adjectives before something happens and that creates such an enthralling start to the piece.

Youíve paced the beginning wonderfully. You donít skip over time or rush but take the reader very delicately forward and so I felt very tense and anxious reading it, which is a remarkable thing to be able to do in the first chapter.

I also love the information youíve included about the trails one has to face before being accepted as a Deatheater. Iíd never thought about that and I found original and exciting. Iíd love to read more about that area itís such a clever concept.

Your characterization of Regulus is really well done. Iíve noticed that when writers write about a character weíre less familiar with they tend to overload the first chapter with backstory and you resisted this temptation and it really paid off. I feel connected to Regulus, I love the vulnerability yet determination youíve instilled in him but youíve allowed him to remain a bit of a mystery which really makes me want to read on.

Iím struggling to think of any CC to give you. I think itís an exceptionally strong start and I will read on with interest.

Author's Response: Hello there! Thanks for taking the time to review!

I'm glad you like my description, especially as I'm never sure whether I've gone over or under or everything I've written is completely pointless, haha!

I'm so happy you liked my characterization of Regulus! Like you said, I really didn't want to overload this first chapter with info, as that can be very boring to read.

Thank you for such a lovely review!


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